wetness

fallen petals...
drops of wetness gleam
on the stalk
--Rita Odeh Nazareth, Israel


The focus of our eyes dips, and in rising, there is more to capture in the moment. The 'fallen ' of Line One intimates a sort of completion of the action, but our focus continues to view even more, the 'gleam' ; both completion aspects are well
juxtaposed to paint an ideally lovely picture, while the use of a present tense verb in Line Two livens the scenario, moving it out of the realm of a still life painting and placing it into the sphere of haiku.

Rita's awareness shared, is enjoyed by the writer and reader; an AHA moment achieved. Is it morning dew or rain? we agree on the latter.


Well done Rita
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator



The kigo for the Kukai #43 was wetness

flower

in her hair
a white gardenia--
the thrill of tango
S.E. Herrin: Des Moines, Iowa


Tango, a dance for two; full of passion, energy and expression; yet still, elegant and dramatic.

The fragment and phrase of this haiku is as multifacted in its duality as the dance itself. There, a happy juxtaposition of passion and elegance. Very specific, her gardenia is a white flower, a truce in the sometimes associated quarrel of the tango dance language. Here again the duality, the juxtaposition of the writer's thought in composng her haiku, resonates.

How easily we find ourselves in step with the rhythm of this poem, striding the haiku dance floor; but our flower is well placed, securely pinned and stays.

There is enough space, for us as readers of the haiku to fill in our own aspects of this tale, hopefully, the purity of the gardenia, blossoms into a love story.


Well done S.E.
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator



The Theme for the Kukai #42 was flower

stone

the closed door
back to my childhood...
key under a stone.
-- Marie-Alice Maire; France


Line Two opens with a nice pivot the word 'back'; (which lets us read Lines 1 and 2 together as well as Lines 2 and 3 together); and, at once adds dimension to this haiku. No longer is the object physical; the 'closed door', now raises the readers awareness to symbols of closure, and spaces for entrance and exits into Marie's life's journey.

Reading Marie's haiku, i sensed a quality of Leiws Carroll (1832-1898).
"If you don't know where you are going, any road will take you there."
--Leiws Carroll, Alice in Wonderland

Having arrived at her today, she glimpses, taking us with her to her yesterday; brilliantly spanning time in her haiku moment. Her haiku seriously reiterates the question asked of countless contemporary haijins, can we really capture a moment, as stated by our haiku definitions.

Well done Marie-Alice
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator


The Kigo for the Kukai #41 was stone