she nurses her ego
in the shower
--Shloka Shankar Bangalore, India
The intangible hot, and the tangible cooling of the water, here, goes well together. Choice of the word 'ego' in line 2 adding resonance to the haiku phrase. The theme of the kukai is stark and clearly presented, in a simple showing of cause and effect. A 15 syllable account, classic three lines, and a tale well told.
Yet, read at another level, the heat of a hot day can be juxtaposed with the intensity of discord to present a haiku well wrought
Well done Shloka
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator
The theme was 'cool down'
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