Wednesday, March 7, 2018

gift

waiting for gifts
in the beggar's hands
first snowflakes
--Cristina Apetrei Romania



This haiku is pertinent to the magic of Christmastime. When hearts are awakened in the contemplation of the birth of the Christ child, Messiah and saviour. He the greatest of all gifts given. And, his symbolic receipt of gifts as the lifting of humanity from our stable selves'.

Yes while we feast and celebrate, there are always those to whom we can extend ouselves to in giving.

One of the comments received about this haiku while in the vote and comment phase of the kukai was: "This picture is awakening our conscience. It calls to my mind the Andersen's fairy tale “The Little Match Girl”. How much so i agree, with the writer of this comment

Christina conforms to the Short Long Short line structure keeping her syllables within the 17 count, but does not rigidly hold to the [go shichi go] or 5/7/5 as the classical platform states. There is the use of fragment and phrase technique, with quite a surprise in her phrase [Lines 2&3]. We just didn't know, where she was going, after the [line 1] fragment.

WELL DONE Cristina
gillena cox, founder/co-ordinator CKK



The prompt for this kukai was gift

See the results HERE

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