in the old coat
sunflower seeds
© Lucia Cardillo; Italy
War is cruel sad lonely business. Separation, death, heartbreak its reward.
Lucia's Line One draws us in immediately to a place troubled by war. Therefore her Line One is loaded with emotions; heavy hearted and weighted down.
The state of the coat in Line 2 resonates with emotion and extends the mood of Line One.
With 11 syllables a play of darkness and light weaves a powerful emotional story.
However she does not leave us in the dark place.
A matryoshka effect intimates: hope as a light embedded in those seeds, just as the seeds themselves are sunken into the old coat.
A story then of hope told, as this is where the haijin leaves us.
Well Done Lucia
Review by Gillena Cox; founder/coordinator
Caribbean Kigo Kukai
The theme of this kukai was 'where sunflowers bloom'
View all of the haiku written
HERE
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