just enough
to dress the empty space
spider's silk
--Gabriel Sawicki, Poland
When we say style, fashion follows the trend of thought; and too, a particular way of doing or presenting. Style sets our eyes on the elegance or ambiance of surroundings and on a more personal note, what is being worn. Gabriel, however in choosing to write a haiku on this theme, looks to nature and what she has to offer. The spider becomes his muse, and she spins into his haiku sphere, the minimalistic features of dedication to space, elegance and fullness of assemblance. He weaves a tale as expertly as the spider himself, with enough nuance to catch our fancy and hold us interested.
He uses the classic three lines: Lines One and Two form his fragment, Line Three his phrase. His three syllable count of Line One is repeated in Line Three giving his haiku control in form and appearance.
The notion of wabi sabi, pertinent in this haiku. Things are as they should be. What else should spiders do, but spin. their spaces into magnificent tales of examples for us, to be ourselves and use what we are given effectively
Well done Gabriel
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator
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Wednesday, April 27, 2016
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glad tidings
Christmas lights
I put the shadows
behind me
--Anna Cates, USA
Truly this is so significant of Christmas, for the new light, who outshines all others is represented in every twinkle at Christmas. We look to that star of Bethlehem which radiates in every symbolic twinkle of lights. The new way is pointed out to us so we are wise to (like Anna) put all shadows behind.
This haiku is forceful in message and light in inspiration
A three line format of fragment and phrase ensues. Line One being her phrase. We read, and look to see what surprise follows.
Essentially a great big message in such a tiny haiku. Thank you Anna
Well done Anna
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator
haiku prompt glad tidings
revisit the results of this kukai
I put the shadows
behind me
--Anna Cates, USA
Truly this is so significant of Christmas, for the new light, who outshines all others is represented in every twinkle at Christmas. We look to that star of Bethlehem which radiates in every symbolic twinkle of lights. The new way is pointed out to us so we are wise to (like Anna) put all shadows behind.
This haiku is forceful in message and light in inspiration
A three line format of fragment and phrase ensues. Line One being her phrase. We read, and look to see what surprise follows.
Essentially a great big message in such a tiny haiku. Thank you Anna
Well done Anna
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator
haiku prompt glad tidings
revisit the results of this kukai
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pink bubblegum
pink bubblegum
again she blossoms
under the sakura
-Brendon Kent, England
A really nice juxtaposition, in Lines One and Three, The appeal to our sense of sight is honed, in a very pleasant and celebratory manner. The festivity of sakura blooming and the coy innocence of blowing gum is nicely pitted against each other. What could follow pink bubblegum? Really anything under the sun. However Brendon surprises us with a burst of blossoms which we will understand to be pink
Well done Brendon
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator
haiku prompt pink bubblegum
revisit the results of this kukai
again she blossoms
under the sakura
-Brendon Kent, England
A really nice juxtaposition, in Lines One and Three, The appeal to our sense of sight is honed, in a very pleasant and celebratory manner. The festivity of sakura blooming and the coy innocence of blowing gum is nicely pitted against each other. What could follow pink bubblegum? Really anything under the sun. However Brendon surprises us with a burst of blossoms which we will understand to be pink
Well done Brendon
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator
haiku prompt pink bubblegum
revisit the results of this kukai
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