Tuesday, January 17, 2017

Christmas beverages

snowflake cocoa . . .
enveloping myself
with old love letters
--Christine L. Villa, USA

The chill of winter greets us, as soft as snowflakes falling, we can settle into warm pyjamas, fluffy slippers or plain amazement like me; when, on vacation In New York, my sister called me to the front door and urged me to put my hands out, only to be caressed by, for the very first time in my life, nature's divine snowflakes.

Since my first snowflake experience is thus, when i read Chrissi's haiku, i could taste, the comforting hot chocolate, and remember the caress of nature, all at the same time. I had not yet gotten to Line Two of her haiku but i was wrapped up, warm and snug

Chrissi continue in her very evocative style, in this haiku, by wrapping herself, and us, in the process; as she smothers herself with a sense of taste, embrace, and memory What's not to love about this haiku.
I am not easily moved to tears, but, if i were one of those at Line Three, I would have certainly have had to reach for a kleenex or two.

This haiku affects our senses in a good way. We want to reach out and hug Chrissi. We want to tell her, this is what memories should be about, keeping us warm when the cold drafts of day to day, whatever the season, drift in.

Well Done Chrissi
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator


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Wednesday, August 31, 2016

the music invites you in

island parade --
losing myself
in the steel drum
--Paul David Mena

Paul defines for us parameters in Line One. The scenic is left to our imagination to fill in the space. We get to add the people, colours, the sounds and the smells. Then he challenges us in Line Two with his choice of 'losing' taking us along to be absorbed with him into defined territory. In Line Three he awakens us out of our reverie with a particular sound. The music so typical and peculiar to where he has transported us. We can hear with him the music in our minds as we read and i dare say read again this charming little haiku.
He opts for a veer away from the 5-7-5, to the more modern free syllable count. So we are given this experience of his appreciation of an island event and rhythm in 3 lines each carrying four syllables

Well Done Paul

--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator

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Wednesday, April 27, 2016

style

just enough
to dress the empty space
spider's silk
--Gabriel Sawicki, Poland

When we say style, fashion follows the trend of thought; and too, a particular way of doing or presenting. Style sets our eyes on the elegance or ambiance of surroundings and on a more personal note, what is being worn. Gabriel, however in choosing to write a haiku on this theme, looks to nature and what she has to offer. The spider becomes his muse, and she spins into his haiku sphere, the minimalistic features of dedication to space, elegance and fullness of assemblance. He weaves a tale as expertly as the spider himself, with enough nuance to catch our fancy and hold us interested.
He uses the classic three lines: Lines One and Two form his fragment, Line Three his phrase. His three syllable count of Line One is repeated in Line Three giving his haiku control in form and appearance.
The notion of wabi sabi, pertinent in this haiku. Things are as they should be. What else should spiders do, but spin. their spaces into magnificent tales of examples for us, to be ourselves and use what we are given effectively

Well done Gabriel
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator


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glad tidings

Christmas lights
I put the shadows
behind me
--Anna Cates, USA


Truly this is so significant of Christmas, for the new light, who outshines all others is represented in every twinkle at Christmas. We look to that star of Bethlehem which radiates in every symbolic twinkle of lights. The new way is pointed out to us so we are wise to (like Anna) put all shadows behind.
This haiku is forceful in message and light in inspiration
A three line format of fragment and phrase ensues. Line One being her phrase. We read, and look to see what surprise follows.
Essentially a great big message in such a tiny haiku. Thank you Anna

Well done Anna
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator

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pink bubblegum

pink bubblegum
again she blossoms
under the sakura
-Brendon Kent, England


A really nice juxtaposition, in Lines One and Three, The appeal to our sense of sight is honed, in a very pleasant and celebratory manner. The festivity of sakura blooming and the coy innocence of blowing gum is nicely pitted against each other. What could follow pink bubblegum? Really anything under the sun. However Brendon surprises us with a burst of blossoms which we will understand to be pink

Well done Brendon

--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator


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Monday, July 27, 2015

dance

windy day-
the dance of a bee
deep in a bud
--Rita Odeh Haifa Israel


We are greeted with movement, for Line One presents us with a windy day. So many possibilities before we read on: hats can be blown off, umbrellas blown away, leaves in whirligig and blossoms falling; all this and more can be crammed into a day of gusts.
However, Rita zeroes in on a bee in a flower. The sweetness of its feeding, the offering of sustenance , knowing the right flower to approach. Precision, knowledge, sustenance, delight all of these issues are snapped into this little haiku, an unusual happening, a common place happening; yet, a haiku to makes us pause read and reread, and kukai players to vote to first place. This is not the conventional five seven five beat. but rather the modern day free syllabic counted haiku, which so many of us prefer to write these days.

Thanks you for this offering Rita, Well done.
-gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator




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[Commentary for the February 2015, last Monthly Caribbean Kigo Kukai, Kukai #56;]

Thursday, June 11, 2015

countdown to Christmas

Christmas countdown -
unsent letters to Santa
in my childhood drawer
--Arvinder Kaur, Chandigarh, India

What is the allure of this haiku? what makes it a first place winner from among twenty two others? I think the surprise of Line 3; Line one seems to be happening, very much so in present, the countdown at Christmas time is quite infectious, its there in our faces and our ears, the media makes sure we get caught up. The bargains, the discounts, the prompts the constant bombardment, to lists and gifts and giving.
Line One is our phrase, with a cutter added, so we pause. We pause, in the present scheme of the countdown.
Then, only to be dished the surprise of yesteryears , cleverly hidden in the her fragment; the era of childhood and not of womanhood as we first assumed.
A little seventeen syallable wonder which endeared the other players to her placement

Well done Arvinder

-gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator





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