Wednesday, April 27, 2016

style

just enough
to dress the empty space
spider's silk
--Gabriel Sawicki, Poland

When we say style, fashion follows the trend of thought; and too, a particular way of doing or presenting. Style sets our eyes on the elegance or ambiance of surroundings and on a more personal note, what is being worn. Gabriel, however in choosing to write a haiku on this theme, looks to nature and what she has to offer. The spider becomes his muse, and she spins into his haiku sphere, the minimalistic features of dedication to space, elegance and fullness of assemblance. He weaves a tale as expertly as the spider himself, with enough nuance to catch our fancy and hold us interested.
He uses the classic three lines: Lines One and Two form his fragment, Line Three his phrase. His three syllable count of Line One is repeated in Line Three giving his haiku control in form and appearance.
The notion of wabi sabi, pertinent in this haiku. Things are as they should be. What else should spiders do, but spin. their spaces into magnificent tales of examples for us, to be ourselves and use what we are given effectively

Well done Gabriel
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator


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glad tidings

Christmas lights
I put the shadows
behind me
--Anna Cates, USA


Truly this is so significant of Christmas, for the new light, who outshines all others is represented in every twinkle at Christmas. We look to that star of Bethlehem which radiates in every symbolic twinkle of lights. The new way is pointed out to us so we are wise to (like Anna) put all shadows behind.
This haiku is forceful in message and light in inspiration
A three line format of fragment and phrase ensues. Line One being her phrase. We read, and look to see what surprise follows.
Essentially a great big message in such a tiny haiku. Thank you Anna

Well done Anna
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator

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pink bubblegum

pink bubblegum
again she blossoms
under the sakura
-Brendon Kent, England


A really nice juxtaposition, in Lines One and Three, The appeal to our sense of sight is honed, in a very pleasant and celebratory manner. The festivity of sakura blooming and the coy innocence of blowing gum is nicely pitted against each other. What could follow pink bubblegum? Really anything under the sun. However Brendon surprises us with a burst of blossoms which we will understand to be pink

Well done Brendon

--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator


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Monday, July 27, 2015

dance

windy day-
the dance of a bee
deep in a bud
--Rita Odeh Haifa Israel


We are greeted with movement, for Line One presents us with a windy day. So many possibilities before we read on: hats can be blown off, umbrellas blown away, leaves in whirligig and blossoms falling; all this and more can be crammed into a day of gusts.
However, Rita zeroes in on a bee in a flower. The sweetness of its feeding, the offering of sustenance , knowing the right flower to approach. Precision, knowledge, sustenance, delight all of these issues are snapped into this little haiku, an unusual happening, a common place happening; yet, a haiku to makes us pause read and reread, and kukai players to vote to first place. This is not the conventional five seven five beat. but rather the modern day free syllabic counted haiku, which so many of us prefer to write these days.

Thanks you for this offering Rita, Well done.
-gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator




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[Commentary for the February 2015, last Monthly Caribbean Kigo Kukai, Kukai #56;]

Thursday, June 11, 2015

countdown to Christmas

Christmas countdown -
unsent letters to Santa
in my childhood drawer
--Arvinder Kaur, Chandigarh, India

What is the allure of this haiku? what makes it a first place winner from among twenty two others? I think the surprise of Line 3; Line one seems to be happening, very much so in present, the countdown at Christmas time is quite infectious, its there in our faces and our ears, the media makes sure we get caught up. The bargains, the discounts, the prompts the constant bombardment, to lists and gifts and giving.
Line One is our phrase, with a cutter added, so we pause. We pause, in the present scheme of the countdown.
Then, only to be dished the surprise of yesteryears , cleverly hidden in the her fragment; the era of childhood and not of womanhood as we first assumed.
A little seventeen syallable wonder which endeared the other players to her placement

Well done Arvinder

-gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator





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Monday, May 18, 2015

back to school the - new term

first day of school...
a monarch butterfly
spreads its wings
-- Shloka Shankar India

Many students view school as confining and restricted, any sensible teacher carries to the classroom the cognizance of rebellion and disruption, they must be ready to handle such issues. The first day back is the point of starting all over again, hopefully renewed and refreshed.
Although this may seem to be the norm. It may not necessarily be the standard.
For Shokla the distraction on the first day back is the Monarch butterfly. Freedom and the ability to soar over oceans and the span of many skies. This beautiful gift of education is caught in the symbol of the lovely bright colourful butterfly
Shokla's haiku is presented in the short/long/short form of three lines. Using her cutter to end Line One and distinguish fragment and phrase.

Well done Sholka
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator



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Saturday, May 16, 2015

reflection

eraser –
my mother's mistakes
no longer mine
--Shloka Shankar, India

Shloka writes in a contemplative mood here, she is drawn to a simple writing tool which transports her in meditative phase to dwell on past, present and future generations; actions, residues, errors and solutions.This haiku intimates action while remaining in a dormant state. Her eraser filled with innate power is never set to work in the poem, not withstanding, its potential remains to fulfil the requirement of the prompt, for our fifty third kukai. This she accomplishes, mijikai style, with eleven syllables, presented in the three line form.

Well done Shloka

--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator


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