dance

windy day-
the dance of a bee
deep in a bud
--Rita Odeh Haifa Israel


We are greeted with movement, for Line One presents us with a windy day. So many possibilities before we read on: hats can be blown off, umbrellas blown away, leaves in whirligig and blossoms falling; all this and more can be crammed into a day of gusts.
However, Rita zeroes in on a bee in a flower. The sweetness of its feeding, the offering of sustenance , knowing the right flower to approach. Precision, knowledge, sustenance, delight all of these issues are snapped into this little haiku, an unusual happening, a common place happening; yet, a haiku to makes us pause read and reread, and kukai players to vote to first place. This is not the conventional five seven five beat. but rather the modern day free syllabic counted haiku, which so many of us prefer to write these days.

Thanks you for this offering Rita, Well done.
-gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator




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[Commentary for the February 2015, last Monthly Caribbean Kigo Kukai, Kukai #56;]

countdown to Christmas

Christmas countdown -
unsent letters to Santa
in my childhood drawer
--Arvinder Kaur, Chandigarh, India

What is the allure of this haiku? what makes it a first place winner from among twenty two others? I think the surprise of Line 3; Line one seems to be happening, very much so in present, the countdown at Christmas time is quite infectious, its there in our faces and our ears, the media makes sure we get caught up. The bargains, the discounts, the prompts the constant bombardment, to lists and gifts and giving.
Line One is our phrase, with a cutter added, so we pause. We pause, in the present scheme of the countdown.
Then, only to be dished the surprise of yesteryears , cleverly hidden in the her fragment; the era of childhood and not of womanhood as we first assumed.
A little seventeen syallable wonder which endeared the other players to her placement

Well done Arvinder

-gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator





Haiku prompt "countdown to Christmas" revisit the results for this kukai

back to school the - new term

first day of school...
a monarch butterfly
spreads its wings
-- Shloka Shankar India

Many students view school as confining and restricted, any sensible teacher carries to the classroom the cognizance of rebellion and disruption, they must be ready to handle such issues. The first day back is the point of starting all over again, hopefully renewed and refreshed.
Although this may seem to be the norm. It may not necessarily be the standard.
For Shokla the distraction on the first day back is the Monarch butterfly. Freedom and the ability to soar over oceans and the span of many skies. This beautiful gift of education is caught in the symbol of the lovely bright colourful butterfly
Shokla's haiku is presented in the short/long/short form of three lines. Using her cutter to end Line One and distinguish fragment and phrase.

Well done Sholka
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator



Haiku prompt "back to school the - new term" revisit the results for this kukai

reflection

eraser –
my mother's mistakes
no longer mine
--Shloka Shankar, India

Shloka writes in a contemplative mood here, she is drawn to a simple writing tool which transports her in meditative phase to dwell on past, present and future generations; actions, residues, errors and solutions.This haiku intimates action while remaining in a dormant state. Her eraser filled with innate power is never set to work in the poem, not withstanding, its potential remains to fulfil the requirement of the prompt, for our fifty third kukai. This she accomplishes, mijikai style, with eleven syllables, presented in the three line form.

Well done Shloka

--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator


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word play

picnic -
butterflies and
flies in the butter
--john mcdonald Ediburgh Scotland

This delightful little haiku was written in response to the haiku prompt "word play" given for the fifty second kukai.
The scene is light and outdoorsy. Line One introduces with one word, a setting where so much fun can be provided: for family, for friend, for lovers. It connotes grassy green spaces, trees, food, gingham spreads, crumbs and ant trails.
Then comes - in the phrase, the care free; he introduces, butterflies. What can be more carefree than butterflies, what can be lighter and more whimsical than butterflies. However John's butterflies fly by not only for whimsy but also for wit, he catches his butterflies and offers them, trapped in butter along with some flies, adding repetition to good measure. LOL, word play indeed.
The kukai players loved this little delight into First Place.



Well done John;
--gillena cox
Caribbean Kigo Kukai - founder/coordinator



Haiku prompt "word play" revisit the results for this kukai